On the 14th day of December

[Alan Barnard]

Okay, Ric, I applaud your efforts but I reeeeeaaaallllllly don't like the last line. Maybe, in part, it's because American English uses the word carton so sparingly--as in carton of milk. 

If I "cart" home a bunch of loose keysticks, I'd but them in a BOX, not a carton. Anyway, the line just seems jarringly wrong, to me. 

Alan Barnard
Salem, MO

----- Original message ----------------------------------------
From: "Richard Brekne" <ricb at pianostemmer.no>
To: pianotech at ptg.org
Received: 12/13/2007 3:19:32 PM
Subject: On the 14th day of December


>Grin.... :)

>On the 14th day of December, a piano came to me...

>    With fourteen wobbly whippens
>    Thirteen coins a-clinking,
>    Twelve tubby bass strings,
>    Eleven  jacks a-jumping,
>    Ten grungy grommets,
>    Nine brittle bridles,
>    Eight damaged dampers,
>    Seven fractured flanges,
>    Six errant elbows,
>    Five broken strings !
>    Four coats of paint,
>    Three warped posts,
>    Two pedals bent,
>    And a carton of several cracked keys.

>Cheers
>RicB


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